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Week 9: Assignment Concept Worksheet

Week 9: Assignment Concept Worksheet

Q Now that you've read about some revision techniques for your writing, it's time to put those concepts to use! For this worksheet, you'll select 3 sentences from your Week 6 Persuasive Essay to edit using the techniques you've learned (specifically those located in part 3 of the reading, "Sentence-Level Revision.") Provide each original sentence, and then the revised version you've come up with. Then, in 1-2 paragraphs, discuss which technique(s) you used to revise your sentences, and why you think the new versions are superior. Include your sentences and analysis in a document and submit it via this page to complete the assignment.

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Obesity has been often the subject of the pure entertainment nowadays. Instead of keeping the eyes on the results, it could be stated that the process of obesity and gaining weight could be the symptoms that can be cured with little changes in the dietary plans. The sedentary lifestyle is another concern that has made people obese in rapid way.